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#21 Posted : Tuesday, July 27, 2010 12:21:17 AM
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Throughout history, nations have risen and fallen like the tides. In order to survive, many have used military strength in order to ensure the safety and autonomy that comes with living within a nation. During the peak of the Roman empire, many historians have stated that it was rome's military technology and power that had allowed it to reach such a massive size. A strong military allowed the romans to gobble up neighboring territories as well as threaten any country that wished to challenge their power. This intimidation allowed the Roman empire to become one of the most succesfull nations in history.

However even with such a strong military presence, even the Roman empire met it's downfall. What led to the fall of the roman empire was not directly atributed to an attack from an invader, but of the empires inablity to protect it's culture. With the changes in beliefs of the roman people, came new ways at looking at government. These changes in governement allowed for the birth of democracy, yet still very much in it's infancy. The shift from a ruling ceasar to the beginning of democracy impeded the ability to protect the influences on the roman people. New ideas and beliefs began to change what was considered to be the culture of the roman people. It was this inability to protect the culture which eventually led to the demise of the empire and return to smaller independant states.

Although a strong military ensures that a country will be protected from invaders, it may not ensure it's complete survival. The ability to protect a nation from within is of equal importance in a nations survival. Protection of a common belief system, culture, and way of life, ensures that a country will not implode on itself; where strong military allows protection from outside forces that may wish to attack. Depending on the source of the attack, a nations ability to use both military and cultural means to protect itself, will ensure it's long and prosperous survival.
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‘Survival of the fittest’, a key underlying principle in Charles Darwin’s theory of evolution, basically dictates that, the strongest, fastest, and best looking will survive, while the weak, slow and the ugly die off. This notion of survival is clearly embedded in our everyday speech and activity, but can it be extended to a nation? War is a creation of mankind, and a reality that affects the lives of almost every human being. In order to protect themselves, countries will spend billions of dollars on the formation of an army, ultimately for the protection and survival of that specific nation. This power is evident in World War II, where the Allies were trying to defeat the Axis, with the intention of destroying Hitler’s regime. The Allies, with their larger numbers and better technology, proved to be a stronger army and had the upper hand, eventually overcoming the Axis and winning the war. Evidently showing that in times of war, a strong army can be a crucial difference to a nation’s survival.

In some cases, like when the country is ravished with internal conflict, the strength of the army is unlikely to be of much use in combating the nations own people. A strong example of this is Iraq and its current state. After the US invaded Iraq and successfully put a halt to Saddam Hussein’s regime, one of the top priorities was to help Iraq build its own army in order for it too gain independence and be able to stop the violence amongst its people. After 7 years, this Iraq army is of little use and the country is still war ravished, obligating Barack Obama to keep his troops there in hopes of rehabilitating the nation to one day provide a safe society for its citizens. Iraq’s deficiency at maintaining social order within the country shows that the strength of the military, when dealing with internal conflict, is not directly related to its ability to survive.

War and military are often tough topics for people to agree on, especially when so many people are suffering from its harmful effects. However, the strength of a military shows its obvious benefits to survival when nations are dealing with international conflict, evident in WWII when the Allies defeated the Axis because of the greater strength off the military. On the other hand, the survival of a nation can not be best protected by a strong military in the case of internal conflict within that nation. Iraq still faces rebellion and fighting from its people despite its growing army.
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#23 Posted : Tuesday, July 27, 2010 1:16:52 AM
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Survival is an innate instinct of all living organisms. Living entities search for food, shelter and stable living conditions to aid their ability to survive. The ability to survive can also be extended to nations. A nation is "surviving" if it can maintain a stable economy, political system and social institutions. During war, survival of a nation is often threatened by outside powers that wish to takeover. Many societies throughout history have developed strong militaries to prevent invasion from outside powers and ensure their survival. Military strength is dependent on the size of the army and the weapons available to them. During World War II the nations apart of the Allies alliance were in constant danger of being invaded by members of the Axis alliance. In response to this threat, the governments of the countries apart of the Allies alliance directed their funds toward strengthening their militaries. They used their funds to develop strong militaries with large numbers of troops and increased their production of weapons. Although the Axis alliance had a strong military, at the end of the war the military strength of the Allies far surpassed that of the Axis powers. As a result the Allies successfully defeated the Axis powers, and extinguished the constant threat to their survival. The Allies required a strong military in order to maintain their economies, social and political institutions which were in constantly threatened by the Axis powers.

While military strength greatly aids the ability of a nation to survive in times of war, during times of peace military strength may not be as important. Currently, Canada has the strongest economy in the world. Unemployment is low, the Canadian dollar is competitive amongst the world's top currencies, and world trade is thriving. Canada's present day military is of mediocre strength when compared to the strength of the American army. Canadian society is not threatened by war, and as a result the government has directed its funds away from strengthening the military and toward maintaining a strong surviving nation. Funds have been used to stabilize the economy, expand social institutions and provide a responsible political system to its citizens.

Although it can be said that a nations ability to survive is often dependent upon is military strength, this is not always the case. Survival is dependent on military strength when a nation is threatened by war. During periods of war and international hostility, the survival of a nation will depend upon its military strength. This held true during the Second World War when the military strength of the Allies overwhelmed that of the Axis powers. The nations of the Allies alliance used their funds to strengthen their armies in order to stop the threat of the Axis powers of invading their nations. However, when a nation is not at war and its survival is not threatened by outside sources, military strength does not determine a nation’s ability to survive. Canada is currently not threatened by war and its government has responsibly directed funds away from improving military strength and towards stabilizing its economic, social and political institutions.
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A nation can be defined as a country which shares a set of goals that the country is interested in perpetuating in order to survive as a nation. These goals can include how the country functions on a day to day basis, how the country taxes their citizens, or the stance that the country takes when there is a world issue. Often times, a country, or nation’s ability to survive can be strongly correlated or dependent on the strength of their military. For example, in the late 1930’s in Germany, the country’s leader (Adolf Hitler) had a goal in mind that he was interested in perpetuating. Hitler (amongst some of his other ideas) was interested in developing an Aryan race, or a group of people who all had fair skin, and blue eyes. As radical as this idea may have been, the ability of Hitler and Germany to perpetuate this idea was strongly influenced by the its military strength. Without their strong and powerful military, this idea would have phased out quite quickly.

However, sometimes a country or nation’s ability to survive is not primarily influenced by how strong their military is. Recently, it became very apparent that there is a shortage of food in the world. Basically there is too little food available for the amount of people that live on earth. This resulted in food prices sky rocketing. Therefore, some people experienced paying higher prices on their groceries, whereas some such as in India were unable to obtain these valuable products. When the citizens of India are unable to purchase all of their necessary food items, the ability of this nation to survive is no longer dependent on its military strength. The ability of this nation to survive is now dependent on how the nation will be able to feed the citizens of this country, and therefore be able to grow as a nation.

The criteria that should be established on when a nation’s ability to survive is dependent on its military strength and when it is not, is quite simple. If the country or nation has their basic needs met, such as being fed, clothed, and having clean water, then any idea that this country would like to perpetuate will be primarily influenced by how strong their military is. In the 1930’s, the majority of people living in Germany were experiencing a high standard of living. Therefore, since the basic needs of the citizens were met, Germany could focus on other goals or ideas that needed to be perpetuated. Any ideas set forth by the leader would be strongly dependent on the strength of the military. If a country’s basic needs are not met, such as not having enough food to eat, or not having clean water, then the country or nation’s ability to survive will not be dependent on military strength. This nation’s ability to survive will be dependent on thinking and exercising a plan that deals with the problem of how to feed and keep their citizens alive.
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- Your introduction focuses too much on how TECHNOLOGY can ensure survival by enhancing military strength, instead of how military strength ensures survival.
- You need to clearly define survival, and stick to that definition for BOTH examples.
- The example of Greece's economy is not well developed, and the reader is not left with the impression that its an example of when MILITARY STRENGTH did not ensure survival...you don't clearly have an example here of another factor ensuring survival (since hand-outs from other countries are not really a reliable source of survival). A stronger example (read other essays posted) would be recommended.
- Minor grammatical & spelling errors present.
- Fairly good control of language.
- Your conclusion is adequate given strength of examples.

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Charles Darwin's exploration of the Galapogos Islands, led him to develop the theory of evolution, with the crux of his thesis being the idea of “survival of the fittest”. The idea that only the species with the most advantageous adaptation survives can be employed to help explain how some nations defend their sovereignty. In the past century warfare has evolved to employ greater means of technology. This advance of technology is essentially an example of how a nation is able to adapt, and therefore strengthen their military power, to better achieve success on the battle field. Although not from recent history, the implementation of the Manhattan Project in the early 1940’s is a prime example of a nation, the USA, along with other allied countries, to advance technology to help end the second world war. The Manhattan Project was a secret project primarily conducted within the USA to advance the area of physics, specifically fission and fusion reactions, in the hope of developing an atomic bomb, which was successful. This specific advance in technology, or adaptation, was an integral part of strengthening the military’s strength which then led to the end of the war.

Although war time necessitates military strength to defend a nations sovereignty, the majority of the time a country is not at war but is in a state of peace. During these times, a country needs to survive in regards of providing its citizens with an economic climate that can support them and provide them with opportunities to increase or maintain a good standard of living. If a nation’s economy fails then the nation’s ability to survive independently is drastically reduced. The country of Greece just recently went through a large economic crisis which force them to seek help from other countries within the European Union. I can be argued that if Greece was not part of such a group of nations, with such deep pockets such as Germany, then Greece would have failed to recover the small amount they did due to the financial handouts from the partner nations. Greece would have been forced to seek help from outside their economic allegiences and would therefore have lost some control over their economy and nation.

In the world climate today, it not only is necessary for countries to have necessary military strength to defend their nations sovereignty during times of war, but it is also necessary for the nations to be economically sound to defend their nations soveirgnty during times of peace. Without the adaptation and military strength of the USA and other Allie countries, due to the development of the atomic bomb, the second world war may have ended differently, with the loss of control of countries such as the USA. However, it has been seen that in times of peace that if a country is not economically stable, such as Greece, the nations sovereignty can also be compromised.

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- Opening statement should be something consistent with what you are trying to argue.
- You misspelled Hitler (as well as other words)
- Careful with run-on sentences
- Stick to the same theme for your examples. You describe how Canada's survival of an economic downturn was not dependent on military strength. This is a completely different 'conflict' vs. the military conflict you described in your first example. You can't compare apples and oranges.
- Great conclusion given the examples you used.

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Growing up, most children have been told that fighting never solves anything. However, the ability to win a battle can be a large factor in a nation's ability to merely survive during times of conflict. The effective fighting strategies and tactics that secure a battle's victory, most often come from a nation's military forces. Throughout history wars have occurred, and it is obvious that military strength has played a significant part in the survival of a nation during times of conflict. An example is Hilter's Regime versus many of the democratic nations of the world in World War II. The democratic nations had developed more effective communication and planning tactics than Hilter's Regime, and ultimately, this enhanced the strength of the democratic militaries, who ultimately defeated Germany.

While military strength may play a large part in the survival of a nation during times of war or conflict, when a nation is not in the midst of a war, the military strength is rather irrelevant in dealing with other situations. Consider Canada's survival of the Great Depression in the 1930's. When stock markets crashed and bare necessities were overpriced or unavailable altogether, the strength of the military was not a factor in the recovery of this nation. Strategic economic and financial planning was key in hoisting Canadians out of the depression.

The factors that contribute to a nation's survival depend on the amount of conflict the nation is involved with at that time. During times of war, a nation's military strength will be a large contributing factor to the survival of a nation. However, when peace prevails, a nation's daily survival depends more on strong financial planning and economic decisions, not military strength. During World War II, the victory of the democratic nations was due largely to their superior military tactics and strength. Canadians, however, overcame the Great Depression with the help of smart economic decisions and financial planning. In today's ever-changing world it appears that nation's must possess the ability to rely on the proper strengths of the nation at the correct time in order to ensure the nation's survival.

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- Your opening example is confusing; it is best to select examples that are simple to present, as well as complex (i.e. requiring thought).
- Remember you want to stick to one theme for your examples. Your first example involves surviving a military attack, but your second example involves surviving an economic downturn. These are not consistent with one another.
- Minor spelling/grammatical errors present
- Conclusion must be better developed, and draw upon the strength of your arguments in preceding paragraphs.


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The world has seen many changes in the past century- two world wars, changing borderlines, the dissolution of countries. It is almost as if the world experiences its own form of “natural selection”. In most of these cases, a nation’s ability to survive has depended on the strength of its military. Victory can be achieved through the size of troops and great leaders with good strategies. The 2nd Sino-Japanese War was a part of the Second World War, and was a fight between the Chinese and Japanese for the control of the western border of China. The war began during a period of instability for China, as there was conflict between the ruling Nationalist party and the growing Communist party. The two regimes had independent armies, which made the Chinese Army weaker to Japanese attacks. In an attempt to save their country from the Japanese, the Nationalist and Communist military troops joined forces, and soon after, the Japanese declared defeat.

Although war is still occurring all over the world, a bigger threat for many countries has been of an economic nature. The United States for example, a country known for its strong military presence, has been facing an economic crisis. Reckless lending practices by financial institutions, as well as a sharp increase in oil and food prices has led the country into what has been deemed the “Great Recession”. The United States has seen a decrease in international trade, a dramatic increase in unemployment, and has had to provide financial assistance to large companies who have incurred large debts. The country is in a state of crisis, and the strength of its military can do nothing to bring it out of this recession. It seems as if during “peacetime”, a country may be more susceptible to internal sources of distress.

In general, a nation’s ability to survive is largely dependant on the strength of its military, especially in times of war. Greater numbers, good leadership, and smart strategy can overcome opponents. But during times when war is not a threat, the cause of a country’s demise may lie within the nation itself, a conundrum independent of military strength.

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- Stick with one example. Mention either WW1 or WW2 (not both).
- A key example you use (Yugoslavia) is misspelled
- You don’t really establish a distinct definition of survival (although perhaps you mean just ‘existing as a country’?). You mention that economics is a determinant of military power. You need to substantiate this claim by saying something like ‘Without a strong economy, a nation cannot develop a strong military force’.
- Your 2nd example becomes confused with survival as maintaining peace, which is a different definition of survival than you used in the first example.
- You should stick to what you discussed in your essay during your conclusion. You mention (out of nowhere) that now a nation’s ability to survive depends on the leader as well (but none of your examples discussed this). Thus your conclusion almost belongs with another essay that described military strength in terms of a leader.


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Throughout history, there have been conflicts between countries all over the world which have led to the use of one’s military. A country’s military strength has shown to play a key role in the survival of its nation and people. A prime example of the necessity of the military is portrayed within World War 1 and World War 2. Countries with a poor economic situation could not afford the adequate supplies and machinery to keep up with the more powerful and economically superior countries. For example, Yougoslavia was taken over by Germany, who was a more aggressive country in World War 2, in order to increase their overall power and land advantage. As a final result, Yougoslovia was dissolved in the following years.

However, a nation’s survival does not always depend on the pure strength of their military or the powerful firearms at their disposal. Instead, diplomacy has been an effective method of maintaining peace throughout the world without resorting to violence and the loss of thousands of lives or a nation as a whole. One specific organization that uses diplomacy and negotiates with other countries to achieve a reasonable outcome is the United Nations. The United Nations has helped in many conflicts all over the world in order to prevent the possibility of war. Thus, a nation without a strong military may still prevail by using the correct diplomatic strategies.

When then is a nation’s ability to survive dependent on their military strength? It is important under severe circumstances such as a large war and depends on the leader of one’s country. The dictator of the country plays a huge role in whether or not the military is going to be needed. With a fierce and fascist dictator, such as Hitler, land gain and preserving the ‘Aryan’ race was his prime goal. As the dictator, he was able to obtain a large number of citizens to fight for his country, thus strengthening his overall power. Countries that were not prepared or lacked the proper resources and dictatorship fell as victims to his terror. This goes to show that without a powerful, motivating leader and the significant resources, a country may not survive in the midst of a worldwide conflict.

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- Careful with run-on sentences.
- You don't actually establish your first example in the opening paragraph. STICK TO the # PARAGRAPH format desired by MCAT markers. You don't, so there is no connection between your opening remarks & the first example.
- You need to define survival
- Careful to stick to the prompt: "In this case, it is clear that a nation (or nations) with a strong military are effective at achieving political success because they can use such a military to achieve set government goals." This sentence seemingly means that you are now discussing political success, instead of survival, even though your example was strong.
- Your 2nd example is confused with extra information, examples etc. It lacks focus, and some aspects of it are debatable.
- Conclusion is confusing, and you get side-tracked discussing your examples instead of bringing them around to establish the criteria required to meet task #3.

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As stated by Joseph C. Wilson, “The last option for a democratic nation is war.” This statement is true on many fronts, but outlines the essential function of a democratic nation at an international level, which is to increase its international reputation in a positive manner and create mutually beneficial relationships with other countries. Although military strength is important for protection, it alone will not achieve success for any nation.

At the height of World War II (1939-1945), absolutely no political compromise could be reached between the Allies and Germany regarding the land disputes that instigated the war from the beginning. As a result, the democratic Allied nations had to turn to this “last option” and deploy their militaries in order to prevent further bloodshed of innocent civilians and reclaim land sought after by the German’s. Although such violent action should not be the primary resort of a democracy, in this case, it was critical that the military of the Allied nations be strong, because if it wasn’t, the German’s would have succeeded and the process of mass sterilization would have continued. In this case, it is clear that a nation (or nations) with a strong military are effective at achieving political success because they can use such a military to achieve set government goals.

Although having a strong military is important for protecting the valuable assets of a nation, it is not the only facet that a successful country can possess. The foundation of a vibrant nation is built on the cornerstones of education, public safety and health care, among others. For a nation to be economically and politically successful, it must ensure that its citizens are being adequately educated so that conflicts and problems at the national level can be solved appropriately and also so that new ideas and approaches can be presented at the national and international levels to improve the stature of these climates. A nation that is safe to live provides security and satisfaction to its inhabitants, and allows for the development of individuals who can succeed at bettering society as a whole. Finally, an adequate health care system allows the sick and wounded to be healed, decrease the likelihood of illness-related deaths, and maintain sanctity within the nation.

It is clear that a strong military is not the only key to the success of a nation. Many other facets of society such as political, economic, social and cultural are critical for ensuring that a country maintains a firm but positive international reputation. These outlets are filled by ensuring that the country has adequate education, safety, and health care, among other factors. However, a strong military is important for protecting these assets. Furthermore, there are situations in which the strength of a military will solely determine the overall success of a nation, such as when it is the last option for a democratic nation, as seen by the Allies in defeating the Germans in World War II. Overall, it is apparent that the hallmark of a successful, powerful and influential nation is in finding the balance between a strong military, and other assets such as education, safety, and health care.

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- Define acronyms used
- Excellent opening remarks
- Elaborate on how "In order for a nation to survive by staying economically strong, the nation should be able to protect itself from foreign threats." You need a specific example.
- You cannot claim that Canada has the strongest economy out of the G8 countries without stating (reliable) criteria ex. GDP. The value of the dollar is quite complex, and doesn't really reflect the entire economy.
- You don't state HOW Canada maintains its ability to survive despite a lack of military force.
- In your conclusion, you bring up a new set of specific examples. Instead, draw upon what was stated previously to tie everything together.
- At times, sentence structures are awkward & confusing.

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A nation's ability to survive is often dependent upon its military strength.

It is said that we live in a "dog eat dog world"; with that being said, should each country aim to produce the most powerful dog? The survival of a nation is mainly defined as how economically stable that nation is. A country's military strength is rated upon the number of troops in contains, and the type of weapon's it contains. In order for a nation to survive by staying economically strong, the nation should be able to protect itself from foreign threats. A key example of this is The United States of America. The U.S. is viewed as one of the most powerful and wealthiest nation's in the world. The country contributes nearly 35% of all taxes towards the military, which explains why it has the most advanced military program along with why it has survived throughout the decades.

Although military strength is usually a key component on a nation's survivability, this isn't always the case. Canada, relative to other large nations in the world, has a fairly standard military with outdated equiptment (including tanks and fighter jets that have been around for decades). However, of all the G8 countries that recently met this year, Canada is the country with the strongest economy. The Canadian dollar is seeing record heights, and unemployment is lower than most countries in the world. As can be seen with this example, a nation's survivability isn't solely based upon military strength.

Although it is initially difficult to differentiate when, and when not, a nation's ability to survive is dependent upon its military strength, a key determinant is whether or not that country faces immediate international terroriest threats. The United States need to have a strong military in order to survive, for it must me able to protect itself from organizations such as Al Qaeda or dangerous countries such as North Korea. Canada, on the other hand, can afford to not have such a state of the art military in order to survive, for it doesn't have to deal with immediate international threats which lead to events such as 9/11. In sum, the more vulnerable a country to international threats, the more it's survivability is based upon it's military strength.

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- Try and integrate your sentences together along a common line of thought: your opening remarks at times seem disjointed (and are more like a list than a paragraph).
- Great end to the first paragraph
- Minor spelling/grammatical errors
- Your theme of warfare in the first example is not consistent with your theme of disease in the 2nd example, making the essay lack continuity.
- Your 2nd example doesn't clearly establish that the nation's survival during ALL times of peace is dependent on health care. It seems like a stretch when stated in the conclusion.

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A strength of a nation is truly test in times of adversity. The power of the military often determines the survival of a country.
Military strength represents a country's ability to defend itself and respond to a crisis. The ability of a nation to survive refers to its ability to ensure the health and well-being of the country's citizens. Military strength allows for the protection of a country's citizens, increasing the country's ability to thrive. For instance, during the second World War, the United States of America suffered an attack on Pearl Harbour in December 1941. This attack by Japan forced the United States to declare war on the Axis alliance in order to defend itself. The attack threatened the safety and well-being of Americans and military action was necessary to address the danger. Thus in this time of war, the ability of the United States to survive as a country was highly dependent on its military capabilities.

Although, military strength can be the determining factor of a country's survival, there are instances where other factors play a larger role. Healthcare is essential to the ensuring the well-being of citizens, which in tern determines the survival of the country as a whole. For example, in June 2009, there was the threat of an H1N1 epidemic across Canada. The Ontario government invested millions of dollars to provide vaccinations to its residents. This focus on fighting H1N1 and investment in healthcare greatly decreased the number of people who contracted the illness. In this situation, the welfare of Canadians was protected by effective healthcare without any military intervention.

It is not always clear if a nation's survival depends on its military strength of some other determining factor. A key component of a country's survival is whether the situation occurs during at time of war and chaos or a time of peace. When the United States was attacked during World War II, military mobilization was needed to defend the nation's citizens and ensure survival. The H1N1 scare occurred during a time of peace where there was n immediate threat to the safety of Canadians. In this case,
the ability of Canada to survive depended on its healthcare, not military strength. It is evident that a nation's ability to survive depends on military strength in times of war, but on effective healthcare
during times of peace.

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- Various significant spelling & grammatical errors.
- Too much preamble in the introductory paragraph.
- Your example of how a lack of military strength resulted in an inability to survive is a 'negative' example. It is always more powerful to provide a positive example i.e. a case where military strength was instrumental in survival.
- Nice example of North vs. South Korea.
- Strong conclusion.
- To improve your score, try and spell more consistently as well as take into account the tips above. Use of more sophisticated examples & language would also improve your score.

SugieJ wrote:
Maintaining soverignty is the key for a nation's survival in the world. A nation is soverign when it is governed by its own people and not in the control of a different nation. The ability to survive as an indepedant nation is usually dependent on its military power. With a strong military a country is able to protect itself from being conquered by another nation. If a nation is taken over through war, that nation is under the control of a different country and therefore no longer soverign. During the recent Iraq War, the independant country of Iraw had a relatively weak army in comparison to its agressors, the United States. Once George W. Bush, the President of United States, decided to invade Iraq, Iraq fell to the United States quickly. Iraq was no longer in control of its self and therefore lost its soverignty. The country of Iraq had little chance of survival against the United States because Iraq had a weaker military.

A nation's soverignity is not always dependant on its ability to fight. A weak nation militaristically can survive with strong diplomatic ties in the world. By being allied with militaristically strong nations, a country is able to keep its soverignty from invaders. With these military alliances, a nation will be protected by other countries's militaries if attacked. During the Korean War in the 1950's, North Korea tried to fully invade the soverign nation of South Korea. Even though South Korea had a weaker military, it was able to stay as an independant country by the help of its allies. With military aid from the United States and the United Nations, the relatively weak South Korea was able to fend off the stronger North Korea and keep control of its own government. The stronger military of the North did not lead to a decrease in South Korea's ability to survive because of its military alliances with other nations.

It is hard to determine if a nation's ability to survive depends on its own military strength or not. However, there is a key sign in knowing when a nation's soverignity relies on its military for its survival. When a country does not have any diplomatic military alliances its survival lies in the hands of its own military strength. In the case of the Iraq War, since Iraq had no strong military alliances, it would have had a better chance of survival if they had a more powerful army to fend of the United States. On the other hand, if the nation in question does have diplomatic military alliances, then its survival lies in the hands of the its allies. With strong diplomatic ties to the United Nations and the United States, South Korea was able to survive against North Korean attacks without relying on its own military strength.

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- Your opening paragraph is disjointed. Ideas do not flow, and it reads very jarringly.
- You need to establish how North Korea's military might has established/maintained its survival.
- Support your India example to a greater extent by truly establishing a link between Ghandi's action and the survival of India (don't just state that his actions were instrumental).
- Your conclusion is very unfocused. The issue here is that you need to address the criteria that determine whether or not a country's survival depends on its military strength (not why North Korea's dictator has been successful at obtaining military funding). Your conclusion that centers on the leader is not supported by your essay.

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PROMPT: A nation's ability to survive is often dependent upon its military strength.

A nations ability to manage to progress as a society is reliant on the strength of the military. Kim Jong Il, a powerful totalitarian communistic dictator rules over North Korea with an iron fist. He is a leader who opposes change and freedom of speech. For a nation to stay together and progress it must be seen as a powerful opponent. Though, it has one of the world’s worst human rights records, North Korea now has the 4th largest army in the world. Around the world, countries are scared of how far the North Korean army has progressed and the weapons of mass destruction that it could use to wage war against other countries.

Though a nation's ability to survive can often depend on its military strength, there are some circumstances in which it does not, such as when Mahatma Ghandi lead the Indian independence movement without the need of an army. He pioneered Satyahagra which is a mass civil disobedience towards tyranny and is based on ahimsa (non violence). For the society to progress it was paramount the change must have come from within the individual himself. India would never have become an independent nation had it not been for Mahatma Ghandi and thus, would not have progressed as a nation.

The debate between whether a nation's ability to survive is dependent upon its military strength is difficult to resolve. However, the guiding principles should be that if the country as a nation is to progress depending on its military strength is when the leader is not willing to change. Kim Jong Il would not have had the funding to build the 4th largest army in the world if everyone had individual rights. A country need not be dependent on its military strength when the change comes from within the individual leader. If Ghandi had not taken drastic measures to bring about a change in society, India might have become stagnant. In sum, the governing principle of when a nation is dependent or not on its military for strength is when there is a change in the individual leader or not.

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- Nice opening statement
- "In order to survive, many have used military strength in order to ensure the safety and autonomy that comes with living within a nation." Doesn't really make sense.
- Capitalization, spelling & grammatical errors present.
- 'Many historians have stated' is a weak and vague way of making a claim. If you can't back it up, re-word it.
- You close the first paragraph by stating that Rome became a SUCCESSFUL nation. The prompt wants you to discuss SURVIVAL. You need to clearly define survival, and mold your examples to support that definition.
- In your 2nd example, you use Rome again. This makes your first arguments much weaker (basically you are arguing against yourself). Also, you blame the fact the Rome didn't protect its 'Culture'; but isn't culture defined by the most common beliefs etc of the people? Your arguments about democracy etc confuse the issue; you never really say how to 'protect' culture. Overall, task #2 is not adequately addressed.
- Conclusion is decent considering the weaknesses of the examples.

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Throughout history, nations have risen and fallen like the tides. In order to survive, many have used military strength in order to ensure the safety and autonomy that comes with living within a nation. During the peak of the Roman empire, many historians have stated that it was rome's military technology and power that had allowed it to reach such a massive size. A strong military allowed the romans to gobble up neighboring territories as well as threaten any country that wished to challenge their power. This intimidation allowed the Roman empire to become one of the most succesfull nations in history.

However even with such a strong military presence, even the Roman empire met it's downfall. What led to the fall of the roman empire was not directly atributed to an attack from an invader, but of the empires inablity to protect it's culture. With the changes in beliefs of the roman people, came new ways at looking at government. These changes in governement allowed for the birth of democracy, yet still very much in it's infancy. The shift from a ruling ceasar to the beginning of democracy impeded the ability to protect the influences on the roman people. New ideas and beliefs began to change what was considered to be the culture of the roman people. It was this inability to protect the culture which eventually led to the demise of the empire and return to smaller independant states.

Although a strong military ensures that a country will be protected from invaders, it may not ensure it's complete survival. The ability to protect a nation from within is of equal importance in a nations survival. Protection of a common belief system, culture, and way of life, ensures that a country will not implode on itself; where strong military allows protection from outside forces that may wish to attack. Depending on the source of the attack, a nations ability to use both military and cultural means to protect itself, will ensure it's long and prosperous survival.

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- Your opening statement "‘Survival of the fittest’, a key underlying principle in Charles Darwin’s theory of evolution, basically dictates that, the strongest, fastest, and best looking will survive, while the weak, slow and the ugly die off." is a run-on sentence. As well, it doesn't ring true...how does 'survival of the fittest' dictate strong/fast/good-looking? These are unsubstantiated claims.
- How is the notion of survival embedded in speech/activities? You don't support this either.
- You need to define survival.
- Instead of the preamble at the beginning of paragraph 1, spend more time developing the Allies vs. Germans example.
- Careful with run-on sentences.
- Your 2nd example loses focus as you bring in too many details ex. 'Barack Obama has to keep his troops there' etc.
- Instead of choosing a negative example (where military strength FAILED to provide survival), provide a positive example (where some other force ALLOWED or PROMOTED survival).
- Nice conclusion.

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‘Survival of the fittest’, a key underlying principle in Charles Darwin’s theory of evolution, basically dictates that, the strongest, fastest, and best looking will survive, while the weak, slow and the ugly die off. This notion of survival is clearly embedded in our everyday speech and activity, but can it be extended to a nation? War is a creation of mankind, and a reality that affects the lives of almost every human being. In order to protect themselves, countries will spend billions of dollars on the formation of an army, ultimately for the protection and survival of that specific nation. This power is evident in World War II, where the Allies were trying to defeat the Axis, with the intention of destroying Hitler’s regime. The Allies, with their larger numbers and better technology, proved to be a stronger army and had the upper hand, eventually overcoming the Axis and winning the war. Evidently showing that in times of war, a strong army can be a crucial difference to a nation’s survival.

In some cases, like when the country is ravished with internal conflict, the strength of the army is unlikely to be of much use in combating the nations own people. A strong example of this is Iraq and its current state. After the US invaded Iraq and successfully put a halt to Saddam Hussein’s regime, one of the top priorities was to help Iraq build its own army in order for it too gain independence and be able to stop the violence amongst its people. After 7 years, this Iraq army is of little use and the country is still war ravished, obligating Barack Obama to keep his troops there in hopes of rehabilitating the nation to one day provide a safe society for its citizens. Iraq’s deficiency at maintaining social order within the country shows that the strength of the military, when dealing with internal conflict, is not directly related to its ability to survive.

War and military are often tough topics for people to agree on, especially when so many people are suffering from its harmful effects. However, the strength of a military shows its obvious benefits to survival when nations are dealing with international conflict, evident in WWII when the Allies defeated the Axis because of the greater strength off the military. On the other hand, the survival of a nation can not be best protected by a strong military in the case of internal conflict within that nation. Iraq still faces rebellion and fighting from its people despite its growing army.

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- Various minor spelling errors
- Excellent opening paragraph. To improve it, read the essay aloud to yourself to spot some awkward sentences and missing commas.
- In your 2nd example, try to avoid saying things that are extreme such as 'Canada has the strongest economy in the world'. These statements can be argued. Instead, take a more even approach and say 'Canada has one of the strongest economies in the world'.
- Great conclusion; careful with repetition.

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Survival is an innate instinct of all living organisms. Living entities search for food, shelter and stable living conditions to aid their ability to survive. The ability to survive can also be extended to nations. A nation is "surviving" if it can maintain a stable economy, political system and social institutions. During war, survival of a nation is often threatened by outside powers that wish to takeover. Many societies throughout history have developed strong militaries to prevent invasion from outside powers and ensure their survival. Military strength is dependent on the size of the army and the weapons available to them. During World War II the nations apart of the Allies alliance were in constant danger of being invaded by members of the Axis alliance. In response to this threat, the governments of the countries apart of the Allies alliance directed their funds toward strengthening their militaries. They used their funds to develop strong militaries with large numbers of troops and increased their production of weapons. Although the Axis alliance had a strong military, at the end of the war the military strength of the Allies far surpassed that of the Axis powers. As a result the Allies successfully defeated the Axis powers, and extinguished the constant threat to their survival. The Allies required a strong military in order to maintain their economies, social and political institutions which were in constantly threatened by the Axis powers.

While military strength greatly aids the ability of a nation to survive in times of war, during times of peace military strength may not be as important. Currently, Canada has the strongest economy in the world. Unemployment is low, the Canadian dollar is competitive amongst the world's top currencies, and world trade is thriving. Canada's present day military is of mediocre strength when compared to the strength of the American army. Canadian society is not threatened by war, and as a result the government has directed its funds away from strengthening the military and toward maintaining a strong surviving nation. Funds have been used to stabilize the economy, expand social institutions and provide a responsible political system to its citizens.

Although it can be said that a nations ability to survive is often dependent upon is military strength, this is not always the case. Survival is dependent on military strength when a nation is threatened by war. During periods of war and international hostility, the survival of a nation will depend upon its military strength. This held true during the Second World War when the military strength of the Allies overwhelmed that of the Axis powers. The nations of the Allies alliance used their funds to strengthen their armies in order to stop the threat of the Axis powers of invading their nations. However, when a nation is not at war and its survival is not threatened by outside sources, military strength does not determine a nation’s ability to survive. Canada is currently not threatened by war and its government has responsibly directed funds away from improving military strength and towards stabilizing its economic, social and political institutions.

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- I would recommend starting the essay with a different statement than the definition of a nation (try instead to set the tone towards solving the prompt's dichotomy).
- Your first 3 sentences don't seem to have anything to do with one another. Try and integrate your ideas more effectively.
- Your first paragraph is focused more on how a strong military can force social change, but you don't establish how it ensured survival (task #1).
- Your food example is not really true; think of a concrete example instead that cannot be debated.
- In the 2nd paragraph, you are supposed to focus on how something else (aside from the military) ensured survival. Instead, you suggest a criteria for when the military is most important (which should be discussed in paragraph 3).
- Conclusion is confusing. It makes it clear that you have gone off the mark with this prompt as far as focusing on what the prompt wants you to achieve.

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A nation can be defined as a country which shares a set of goals that the country is interested in perpetuating in order to survive as a nation. These goals can include how the country functions on a day to day basis, how the country taxes their citizens, or the stance that the country takes when there is a world issue. Often times, a country, or nation’s ability to survive can be strongly correlated or dependent on the strength of their military. For example, in the late 1930’s in Germany, the country’s leader (Adolf Hitler) had a goal in mind that he was interested in perpetuating. Hitler (amongst some of his other ideas) was interested in developing an Aryan race, or a group of people who all had fair skin, and blue eyes. As radical as this idea may have been, the ability of Hitler and Germany to perpetuate this idea was strongly influenced by the its military strength. Without their strong and powerful military, this idea would have phased out quite quickly.

However, sometimes a country or nation’s ability to survive is not primarily influenced by how strong their military is. Recently, it became very apparent that there is a shortage of food in the world. Basically there is too little food available for the amount of people that live on earth. This resulted in food prices sky rocketing. Therefore, some people experienced paying higher prices on their groceries, whereas some such as in India were unable to obtain these valuable products. When the citizens of India are unable to purchase all of their necessary food items, the ability of this nation to survive is no longer dependent on its military strength. The ability of this nation to survive is now dependent on how the nation will be able to feed the citizens of this country, and therefore be able to grow as a nation.

The criteria that should be established on when a nation’s ability to survive is dependent on its military strength and when it is not, is quite simple. If the country or nation has their basic needs met, such as being fed, clothed, and having clean water, then any idea that this country would like to perpetuate will be primarily influenced by how strong their military is. In the 1930’s, the majority of people living in Germany were experiencing a high standard of living. Therefore, since the basic needs of the citizens were met, Germany could focus on other goals or ideas that needed to be perpetuated. Any ideas set forth by the leader would be strongly dependent on the strength of the military. If a country’s basic needs are not met, such as not having enough food to eat, or not having clean water, then the country or nation’s ability to survive will not be dependent on military strength. This nation’s ability to survive will be dependent on thinking and exercising a plan that deals with the problem of how to feed and keep their citizens alive.

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A nation's ability to survive is often dependent upon its military strength

Military strength has proven very effective in insuring the survival of many nations involved in the past two world wars. During World War II, Manhattan project lead the world to fear America for its military power after dropping its first nuclear weapon. Also the World War II saw Germany’s collapse which was due to its inability to keep up its military strength. Germany kept invading other nations and at last it didn’t have enough power to face the British. In embracement, Hitler committed suicide when his military forces were proven ineffective against the British.

Diplomacy is another means of ensuring a nations ability to survive. Nelson Mandela, the first President of South Africa is one of the most diplomatic presidents the world has seen. South Africa was bound to collapse like many African nations abandoned by the colonizing countries due to the tactics used by freedom fighters. Nelson Mandela however chose a significantly different path that had not been tried by any other African freedom fighter. Nelson Mandela fought for his people but did not order attacks to the White man, nor did he nationalize their properties once he was in power. The Whites were allowed equal rights as the blacks and although it took a longer time to gain independence from the Dutch, today South Africa is the most successful country in the African continent. After its survival was threatened by apartheid, a few decades later, not only is it economically successful, South Africa also held the soccer World Cup 2010 which brought all nations to celebrate together.

When a chance of achieving middle grounds is jeopardize, due to power struggle or between leaders with compromised ability to communicate, military power is essential for the survival of a nation. When communication is possible on the other hand, diplomacy proves to be a more successful means of ensuring survival of a nation.
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- Various spelling/grammatical errors
- At times, sentences are missing words or are in awkward orders.
- Your first example of WW2 lacks focus; you need to choose ONE battle or ONE country and explain how this relates to the prompt specifically.
- Careful with run-on sentences.
- Good 2nd example, and it is well-developed.
- You need to add in a transition into your third paragraph before resolving the prompt.

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Military strength has proven very effective in insuring the survival of many nations involved in the past two world wars. During World War II, Manhattan project lead the world to fear America for its military power after dropping its first nuclear weapon. Also the World War II saw Germany’s collapse which was due to its inability to keep up its military strength. Germany kept invading other nations and at last it didn’t have enough power to face the British. In embracement, Hitler committed suicide when his military forces were proven ineffective against the British.

Diplomacy is another means of ensuring a nations ability to survive. Nelson Mandela, the first President of South Africa is one of the most diplomatic presidents the world has seen. South Africa was bound to collapse like many African nations abandoned by the colonizing countries due to the tactics used by freedom fighters. Nelson Mandela however chose a significantly different path that had not been tried by any other African freedom fighter. Nelson Mandela fought for his people but did not order attacks to the White man, nor did he nationalize their properties once he was in power. The Whites were allowed equal rights as the blacks and although it took a longer time to gain independence from the Dutch, today South Africa is the most successful country in the African continent. After its survival was threatened by apartheid, a few decades later, not only is it economically successful, South Africa also held the soccer World Cup 2010 which brought all nations to celebrate together.

When a chance of achieving middle grounds is jeopardize, due to power struggle or between leaders with compromised ability to communicate, military power is essential for the survival of a nation. When communication is possible on the other hand, diplomacy proves to be a more successful means of ensuring survival of a nation.

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