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- Stick to ONE definition of survival. Remember the prompt doesn't want you to discuss what it means to survive, rather when/if a nation's survival depends on military strength.
- Careful with various spelling errors.
- Nice example of WW2 Germany, but a stronger angle to take on this example is to say that the Allied Forces overwhelmed Germany (ensuring their survival) by an overpowering military strength i.e. the Allied Forces relied on their military strength for survival. Its a positive example instead of a negative one.
- Don't re-define survival in the 2nd paragraph. Stick to what you used in the first paragraph.
- Injecting the importance of health care over military strength in the 2nd paragraph detracts from the focus of the essay; instead just stick with 'Costa Rica has a high standard of living and maintains its survival based on its lucrative economy, and not its military strength'.
- In your conclusion, you should bring home the point that at times of peace ECONOMIC strength is key, whereas during times of war MILITARY strength is key for survival.
7vrb wrote:A nation's ability to survive can be measured in many ways. The ambiguity comes from the term "survive". A nation that survives could indicate a nation that prevails in war; however it could also indicate a nation that is able to maintain a relatively good quality of life for most citizens and a stable economy without the need for foreign aid. When a nation must survive attack, its ability to do so is often dependant on the strength of its military. An example of this is Germany during World War Two (WWII). Germany had an excellent military and was able to attack, win, and occupy several European courties during the war. The German military was able to withstand attacks from not only the countries it was taking over but many attacks from the Allies, including the United States, Canada, and the British. Luckily, as the military strength of Germany weakened due to the continuous help of the Allied forces, Germany and the Nazi regime was defeated. This shows that a strong military can be the key to a nation's survival, but as the military weakens, so does the ability of the nation to prevail.
Although military strength is indeed important for a nation to survive a direct attack, a nation can "survive" without having any part in a war. As long as a country is able to provide its people with a stable economy and relatively good quality of like it can be said to be surviving. Costa Rica, for example, has no military to speak of but is flourishing due to its lucrative tourism industry and fruit exports. The healthcare available in Costa Rica has been ranked higher than the healthcare of the United States, which has one of the strongest militaries on the globe. This demonstrates that a military is not always necessary for a country to be successful and survive. Indeed, if the healthcare of Costa Rica exceeds that of the United States, perhaps it would be in the best interest of the United States to divert some of its military funds to improving healthcare quality.
The role of the military in the survival of a country depends on the position of the country. If a nation is provoking or being provoked then military strength is very important for the nation to be able to survive an attack. In a situation like that of Germany in WWII, the strength of the military determines how long a nation will survive in a war. If Germany's military was not as strong as it was, Germany would not have hoped to hold out and progress through the war as long as it did. However, if a country is peaceful with no need to create or participate in a war, military strength does not predict the ability of such a nation to survive. The nation of Costa Rica is an example of this. With no military it is still flourishing, let alone surviving. Therefore, a strong military is important for a nation at war, or planning to be at war, to survive, however military strength is not necessary for a nation to be successful and provide for its citizens.
Thank you for your help Nickie!