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#41 Posted : Monday, July 26, 2010 11:24:26 PM
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-Your example of Obama's health care reform is great and many of the issues can relate to this essay. However, for clarity it is best to discuss only one of the issues relating to the health care reform. Further, although it is implied that Obama is going to enforce these new responsibilities of the rich, you should still specifically mention the idea of responsibility in your concluding sentence.
-Good refuting paragraph
-Good resolution principle. To make your essay stronger, echo this principle in your supporting and refuting paragraphs. Don't make me wait until the final paragraph to understand that you are going to argue about the state of the economy (which was not mentioned at all in the supporting paragraph)

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Abraham Lincoln once said "you cannot help the poor by destroying the rich". In today's society the division of class is becoming ever more evident. The rich are getting richer and the poor are getting poorer. If this is true, then individuals apart of the upper class have a responsibility as human beings to distribute some of their wealth amongst the lower class. The number one cause of bankruptcy in the United States of America is due to unpaid medical bills. Many American citizens do not get the medical attention they require because they do not have insurance or are unable to afford the cost of medical services. President Obama took notice to this and to the declining state of healthcare in the United States and embarked on a mission to reform healthcare. His administration legislated the Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act (PPACA) in March 2010 in efforts to better the state of the health care system. Expanding Medicaid eligibility and subsidizing insurance premiums are among the many new pieces of legislation brought into affect. Another important aspect of this policy is individuals belonging to high income tax brackets are required to pay a new Medicare tax. The money collected in taxes from wealthy individuals will be used by the government to fund Medicaid programs and subsidize insurance programs for individuals who cannot afford medical care. Individuals from the upper class will not face economic uncertainties from this new tax, thus it is justifiable that the American government tax these individuals in order to adequately provide for the underprivileged individuals of society.

If wealthy individuals have a responsibility to help the poor, then should wealthy nations have a responsibility to help underprivileged nations? Wealthier nations should help poverty-stricken nations only after they are able to provide for their citizens. One of President Obama's platform goals when running for office in 2008 was to double America's foreign aid by the end of his four year term in efforts to improve America's tarnished image around the world. Although this was an important goal, this was prior to the current recession. The recession caused a plummet in the American economy and resulted in many Americans losing their jobs and homes. Many Americans struggled to make ends meet. President Obama was forced to reconsider his ambitious foreign aid policy and make sure the American government was able to provide a safe and stable life for its citizens. The government took responsibility for its citizens and decided to use the some of the money put aside for foreign aid and implement an economic stimulus in hopes to improve the economy. When a nation does not have the means to provide for itself, aiding the impoverished cannot be justified.

The circumstances surrounding when the rich have a responsibility to help the poor are not trivial. The decisive factor for when the wealthy have a responsibility to help the poor is as follow: if the wealthy (individuals or nations) are not facing unstable economic circumstances than they have a responsibility to help those in need. President Obama took this upon himself and his administration when implementing the PPACA. The wealthy are not facing unstable financial circumstances, and as a result they should be taxed in order to provide medical care for those who cannot afford it. However, if the wealthy are facing troubled and uncertain economic circumstances they do not have a responsibility to aid the poor. This held true during the recent recession. President Obama was forced to reduce foreign aid in order to stabilize the American economy and ensure that American citizens were properly provided for.

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#42 Posted : Monday, July 26, 2010 11:30:29 PM
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-Your supporting example is great to demonstrate that the rich provide aid, but you don't discuss the notion of responsibility.
-Good refuting example, but again, when you conclude it is a good idea to talk about the notion of resonsibility.
-Your resolution principle is too complex. You can only argue for one point (i.e. economic stability or natural disasters, not both). The MCAT wants a resolution principle (singular). Both of yours make sense and could work, but you should only be arguing one. It will help to focus your essay and ensure that you actually do what the MCAT wants. You were on track to get a 4 until this.

quote=tulipgirl]Based on the theory of evolution, one way for a group of species to survive is through cooperation. Human society, like any others, is no exception. For the past few decades, natural disasters and catastrophies such as earthquake, hurricane, and tsunami happen to occur more frequently around the globe. As a result, it is often the poorest region of the world who suffer the most out of these catastrophies.Thus, wealthy part of the world should have responsibility to take care of people from poor regions during these unexpected events. For example,in January 2010 Haiti experienced a magnitude of 7.0 Mw earthquake which caused millions of death and homeless. Because Haiti is one of the poorest country in the world, it lacked sufficient funds for humanitarian aid. Indeed, many wealthy nations worldwide including the U.S. responded to appeal for humanitarian aid, rescue and medical teams. Some rich celebrities even donated part of their own personal money. Although recovery is still years away for Haiti, rich nations helped thier poor neighbour Haiti to go through its toughest time.

However, in some situations rich nations do not have the responsibility to help the poor. These cricumstances often happen when wealthier nations face thier own economical crisis and no longer have the ability to aid other poor nations. A situation of this is during economical depression since 2008. U.S. suffered severe economical loss of the century as millions of citizens watched the collapse of thier stock market helplessly. Many citizens lost their jobs, sabings, investment, and even their homes. Thus, U.s. government invested tighter regulations and funds in rebuilding major domestic companies and corporations to help their own citizens. Rather than helping poor nations, this act protected U.S. economy from diaster. Before aiding poor nations,it was U.S. economy which needed revival first.

The question of when the rich have responsibility to help the poor is debatable. Nevertheless, the defining principle appears to be twofold: it is dependent on whether the economy of the rich nations appears to be stable, as well as if natural disasters have hurt poor nations that is threatening the lives of a significant portion of society. In the case of the Haiti earthquake, millions of people were affected by the tremedous diaster while rich nations appeared to be economically stable, to help the poor became unquestionable. On the other hand, during economical depression helping other nations could have negative effect on U.S. economy. Then economical recession of its own was more important since rich nations like U.S. could help poor nations in the future.[/quote]
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#43 Posted : Monday, July 26, 2010 11:39:04 PM
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-Good supporting example. I am glad to defined "responsibility" to be a "moral responsibility." Many other people have used the example of Haiti, but because the situation did not enforce nations to send aid, they have a difficult time proving responsibility.
-Your refuting example should actually support the notion that the "rich do not have a responsibility." Your example is much more hypothetical and abstract. You should that a rich person can be a drug addict, therefore money does not help drug addicts and it must be a personal choice to get rid of the habit. I think there is some truth to your train of logic, but because it is all hypothetical your argument is weakened.
-Your resolution principle is weak because your arguments of "unavoidable and unforeseen situations" and "self-destructive behaviour" do not relate to each other. What if I were to ask you about a single mother or a poor drug addict who does wish to turn his life around. Your rule is not very practical for situations other than the ones you listed as examples. What would be a better resolution principle is the rich have a responsibility for the needs of the poor (e.g. food, water, etc), but not for their wants (i.e. better house). See how my rule encompasses all situations? You should aim for something like this.

defeoluc wrote:
The rich get richer, and the poor get poorer, yet somehow society sustains itself and people are forced to life with what they have. In all societies there exists social classes, and separation among the people. As human beings, it is in our nature to care for one another, and come together in times of peril. Sometimes, the rich have a moral responsibility to use their money and power to lend a hand to the poor. This is especially evident when looking at the cooperation between rich and poor nations. In January 2010, a 7.0 magnitude earthquake struck the poor nation of Haiti. Within hours the US, Canada, and many other first world nations, were getting together teams to assist in the aftermath of the earthquake. Not only was physical aid sent to Haiti, to help the injured and trapped, there was also millions of dollars of foreign aid sent, through government funding, and through generous donations, to help rebuild Haiti. Without this help Haiti would have never been able to begin re-building after the earthquake, and the death toll would have been substantially higher, due to the diminished living conditions after the disaster. This shows that in times of disaster, richer nations have a moral obligation to assist by whichever means available, in order to protect their fellow man.

However, sometimes the poor are involved in activities and habits that no matter what help is provided, it will not be effective, and often will be a waste of resources. These are dire situations, but drug addiction can take these tolls on an individual. Kurt Cobain, a rich musician, despite having more than enough money to help himself through a heroin addiction, he still succumbed to its inevitable fate. This remains proof, that the rich cannot help even the poorest of drug addicts. Addicts must want to change their behaviour, and demonstrate so by checking themselves into a not-for profit rehabilitation centre. Money just simply is not enough to fix this ‘disease’ and responsibility does not fall on the rich to help the poor in this situation.

As humans, the choice of whether or not to help someone can be an extremely tough decision to make. However, it stands to reason that a moral responsibility is bestowed upon the rich during unavoidable and unforeseen circumstances, such as the earthquake in Haiti. Natural disasters bring pain and suffering to large populations, and the rich should provide the helping hand. On the other hand, when the poor are engaging in self destructive and unpromising behaviours, such as drug addiction, the responsibility shifts towards the individual them self. The money provided by the rich would be unable to help the poor in any constructive way, and thus a wasted resource.

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#44 Posted : Tuesday, July 27, 2010 1:53:45 AM
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As children we are all taught the golden rule; do unto to others, as you would have unto yourself. People who have experienced great successes (such as wealth, ownership, and power) in their lives must abide by this rule and help others who are not as fortunate. Wealthy individuals have an obligation to help others find and obtain the necessities of life such as food, shelter, clothing, and access to education. In times of great need and devastation it is more important that the wealthy band together in order to help those who have been stricken by poverty or even worse death. For example, Haiti (the poorest country in the Western hemisphere) has always received government aid from more prominent and wealthy first world countries. However, this was most evident when the earthquake struck Haiti in January of 2010. After news of this natural disaster traveled around the world, wealthy countries took it upon themselves to raise funds to help Haiti recover. The United States and Canada both held telethons, which raised thousands of dollars to be donated to Haiti. The Canadian government also vowed to match each donation made a Canadian citizen, once again increasing the funds that went to help Haiti. It is evident from this example that the rich have a responsibility to help poorer individuals.
While natural disasters and crises might cause wealthy people to group together, there may be circumstances when this is not the best course of action. For example, North Korea is a very secretive and communist country. North Korea doesn’t allow any foreign aid and does not allow their own people to travel outside their country. But many North Koreans live below the poverty line and are in desperate need of outside aid. However, wealthy individuals are unlikely to give aid because they are unsure of exactly where their money is going to and if it is even reaching those who need it most.
It is most often the case that those who possess the wealth to help others will dispense money to help those less fortunate this may not always be the case. It is the responsibility of the rich to help the poor when they cannot be sure of where their money is going and if it going only to help sustain corrupt governments. This was exemplified by North Korea and aid is unlikely to be given because of the financial mystery of the country. However, if it is evident where the money will go and it, then wealthy people do have a obligation to help those in need. For example, Haiti is finally starting to re-cooperate because of the aid that many countries gave.
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#45 Posted : Wednesday, July 28, 2010 12:25:25 AM
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-Good supporting argument
-Good refuting argument. To make it stronger, I would recommend specifically relating your example back to your argument after you state the example.
-Your resolution principle is good. However, you do your self a disservice by making it so specific. Saying the rich do not have a responsibility if they cannot be sure how how their funds will be used it great. By adding the clause of about corrupt government, it seems as though you are making a rule that clearly only applies to your example, when there are many instances that the rich shouldn't give money simply because they do not know if their money will be used for "good".

Alanna McMurray wrote:
As children we are all taught the golden rule; do unto to others, as you would have unto yourself. People who have experienced great successes (such as wealth, ownership, and power) in their lives must abide by this rule and help others who are not as fortunate. Wealthy individuals have an obligation to help others find and obtain the necessities of life such as food, shelter, clothing, and access to education. In times of great need and devastation it is more important that the wealthy band together in order to help those who have been stricken by poverty or even worse death. For example, Haiti (the poorest country in the Western hemisphere) has always received government aid from more prominent and wealthy first world countries. However, this was most evident when the earthquake struck Haiti in January of 2010. After news of this natural disaster traveled around the world, wealthy countries took it upon themselves to raise funds to help Haiti recover. The United States and Canada both held telethons, which raised thousands of dollars to be donated to Haiti. The Canadian government also vowed to match each donation made a Canadian citizen, once again increasing the funds that went to help Haiti. It is evident from this example that the rich have a responsibility to help poorer individuals.

While natural disasters and crises might cause wealthy people to group together, there may be circumstances when this is not the best course of action. For example, North Korea is a very secretive and communist country. North Korea doesn’t allow any foreign aid and does not allow their own people to travel outside their country. But many North Koreans live below the poverty line and are in desperate need of outside aid. However, wealthy individuals are unlikely to give aid because they are unsure of exactly where their money is going to and if it is even reaching those who need it most.

It is most often the case that those who possess the wealth to help others will dispense money to help those less fortunate this may not always be the case. It is the responsibility of the rich to help the poor when they cannot be sure of where their money is going and if it going only to help sustain corrupt governments. This was exemplified by North Korea and aid is unlikely to be given because of the financial mystery of the country. However, if it is evident where the money will go and it, then wealthy people do have a obligation to help those in need. For example, Haiti is finally starting to re-cooperate because of the aid that many countries gave.

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#46 Posted : Wednesday, July 28, 2010 4:48:00 AM
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Malaria is a disease which kills thousands of infants before the age of five in the most impoverished regions in Africa. For centuries, the only preventive medicine against malaria in these impoverished regions was the incomplete dominance of the sikcle cell anemia gene. However, there is now a cure for malaria in the form of a candy as a result of decades of research by scientists but most importantly the financial contributions of the Bill and Melinda Gates foundation. Philanotropy and donating to charity are often the preferred past time for the ultra wealthy; undoubtedly their contribution often solves the proverty issues ranging from malaria to stravation. The rich often rightfully use part of their immense wealth to help aleviate the pain and suffering of the poor in myraid of ways.

The rich can be willing helpers for the poor but their efforts do not always result in positive outcomes. The African country of Mozimbique was the world's largest exporter of cashew nuts. The country's GDP was one of the lowest on the continent behind Zimbabew. The country's population was deeply imporverished and the World Bank and the IMF decided to step in and alleviate the stagnant economy. They were willing to providing a stimulus package for the economy, upon Mozimbique's government agreed to close down a large portion of cashew farms and guide the displaced farmers to join the industrial sector. The govenrment followed the IMF's instructions but economic growth did not followed, the economy continued to be stagant with a large portion of the displaced farmers remained unemployed as Mozimbique's factories were unable to compete with other third world countries.

The rich may and often do help leviate the poor's problems, thus making the world a better place. However, there are situations which the rich may have the means but simply do not have the plan to help the poor as in the case with the IMF and Mozimbique. The rich's responsiblity to help the poor have resulted in a cure for malaria but they have also resulted in finicial fiasco. Thus the rich should strive to help the poor by providing a complete tangible solution to a specific issue and not try to over-reach by suggesting a complete overhaul of the poor's lifestyle. By identifying a specific problem such as malaria or poor crop yeild the rich can use their wealth to specifically address these problems. When the rich overestimates their influences and suggests a complete overhaul of a poor regions' economy to lift a poor nation out of proverty disasters can strike.
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Naturally, in any society, there exists a division between the various classes, caused by inequitable distribution of income and opportunity. This variability in present in developed nations such as Canada and the United States, as well as developing nations such as Ghana and Guatemala. The more affluent members of society tend to have very little trouble acquiring the basic necessities of life, such as shelter and food, while the poorer members may spend every cent they have covering only the basics. Because this gap exists, it is often necessary for the rich to assist in providing the less fortunate population with the means of attaining some of the essentials of a quality life. Taxing income is a means of taking proportionally equally from both the rich and the poor in society in order to fund the government to maintain upkeep of the country, including infrastructure development, and running government programs such as welfare and public healthcare. On the other hand, by taxing goods and services a government can take a more progressive approach from garnering larger proportions from the more affluent population, who tend to have a greater disposable income to spend on non-essentials. In Ontario, the recently implemented HST tax has made changes including reducing taxes on basic items such as groceries, while increasing the tax on luxury goods and services such as cosmetics and salons. This change helps to take more money from the rich, in order to put into programs which will help the whole of society.

In certain cases, it cannot be expected from the rich to simply give to the poorer members of society. In Canada, in order to receive unemployment payments, it is necessary to prove that the individual seeking assistance has justifiable reasoning, and is actively searching for work. This helps to ensure that money from tax-payers, which is derived for the majority from the wealthier portion of society, is preferentially given to poorer people who have shown that they are actively looking to contribute to their society, and to help themselves to finance their own lives.

In order for any society to run smoothly, it is important that the basic rights and necessities of it's citizens of well looked after. One way to help achieve this, and to help close the gap between classes in society, is to take from the rich and give to the poor. This helps all members of society, rich and poor, by decreasing crime rates, and achieving overall satisfaction with government. However, although it is often necessary for the rich to help the poor, it is not the responsibility of the wealthier members of society to support those who are not working to help themselves. If the poor are not actively working to achieve independence and self-reliance, simply offering financial assistance will not help to fix the problem, and issues related to the income gap will continue to exist.
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#48 Posted : Thursday, July 29, 2010 2:23:27 AM
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-Very cool supporting example, however you did not paraphrase the prompt or tell me your argument before you stated your example. An example is only good at supporting an argument, it does not take the place of the argument itself and saying the argument after the example lacks much impact.
-Further, you don't talk about the issue of "responsibility" in your supporting paragraph.
-You do not refute the prompt. The instructions ask you to detail when the rich do not have a responsibility for the poor. It does not ask when the rich's efforts to help the poor fail. Be sure to read the instructions and do EXACTLY what they say. That is what you are marked on.
-Your resolution paragraph is more your opinion about what a good strategy would be for the rich to help the poor. What the MCAT wants is for you to detail the specific circumstances in which the rich do have a responsibility to the poor and when they do not. Please re-read what the requirements are for each paragraph in the writing sample manual. This will help you improve greatly as your writing style is not too bad.

ChanC wrote:
Malaria is a disease which kills thousands of infants before the age of five in the most impoverished regions in Africa. For centuries, the only preventive medicine against malaria in these impoverished regions was the incomplete dominance of the sikcle cell anemia gene. However, there is now a cure for malaria in the form of a candy as a result of decades of research by scientists but most importantly the financial contributions of the Bill and Melinda Gates foundation. Philanotropy and donating to charity are often the preferred past time for the ultra wealthy; undoubtedly their contribution often solves the proverty issues ranging from malaria to stravation. The rich often rightfully use part of their immense wealth to help aleviate the pain and suffering of the poor in myraid of ways.

The rich can be willing helpers for the poor but their efforts do not always result in positive outcomes. The African country of Mozimbique was the world's largest exporter of cashew nuts. The country's GDP was one of the lowest on the continent behind Zimbabew. The country's population was deeply imporverished and the World Bank and the IMF decided to step in and alleviate the stagnant economy. They were willing to providing a stimulus package for the economy, upon Mozimbique's government agreed to close down a large portion of cashew farms and guide the displaced farmers to join the industrial sector. The govenrment followed the IMF's instructions but economic growth did not followed, the economy continued to be stagant with a large portion of the displaced farmers remained unemployed as Mozimbique's factories were unable to compete with other third world countries.

The rich may and often do help leviate the poor's problems, thus making the world a better place. However, there are situations which the rich may have the means but simply do not have the plan to help the poor as in the case with the IMF and Mozimbique. The rich's responsiblity to help the poor have resulted in a cure for malaria but they have also resulted in finicial fiasco. Thus the rich should strive to help the poor by providing a complete tangible solution to a specific issue and not try to over-reach by suggesting a complete overhaul of the poor's lifestyle. By identifying a specific problem such as malaria or poor crop yeild the rich can use their wealth to specifically address these problems. When the rich overestimates their influences and suggests a complete overhaul of a poor regions' economy to lift a poor nation out of proverty disasters can strike.

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-Good supporting argument. Good example, but it would be better it if it a little more concise. Also, you conclusion should talk about exactly what you are arguing, that the rich are give to the "poor"... not to help "the whole society."
-Your refuting paragraph does not refute the prompt. Instead you tell me of a situation in which the rich are still giving to the poor, however there are stipulations on the poor.
-Your resolution principle tries to resolve two arguments that do not relate, which makes it weak. You talk about about "needs" vs "people who do not want to help themselves." How would your principle work if there was someone who didn't want to help themselves, but still had their basic needs unmet? A stronger stance would have been that the rich should support for needs (i.e. food/shelter), but not for wants. Do you see how my two arguments relate well together and thus my resolution principle is strong. IT is also practical because it could fit every situation.

jflear wrote:
Naturally, in any society, there exists a division between the various classes, caused by inequitable distribution of income and opportunity. This variability in present in developed nations such as Canada and the United States, as well as developing nations such as Ghana and Guatemala. The more affluent members of society tend to have very little trouble acquiring the basic necessities of life, such as shelter and food, while the poorer members may spend every cent they have covering only the basics. Because this gap exists, it is often necessary for the rich to assist in providing the less fortunate population with the means of attaining some of the essentials of a quality life. Taxing income is a means of taking proportionally equally from both the rich and the poor in society in order to fund the government to maintain upkeep of the country, including infrastructure development, and running government programs such as welfare and public healthcare. On the other hand, by taxing goods and services a government can take a more progressive approach from garnering larger proportions from the more affluent population, who tend to have a greater disposable income to spend on non-essentials. In Ontario, the recently implemented HST tax has made changes including reducing taxes on basic items such as groceries, while increasing the tax on luxury goods and services such as cosmetics and salons. This change helps to take more money from the rich, in order to put into programs which will help the whole of society.

In certain cases, it cannot be expected from the rich to simply give to the poorer members of society. In Canada, in order to receive unemployment payments, it is necessary to prove that the individual seeking assistance has justifiable reasoning, and is actively searching for work. This helps to ensure that money from tax-payers, which is derived for the majority from the wealthier portion of society, is preferentially given to poorer people who have shown that they are actively looking to contribute to their society, and to help themselves to finance their own lives.

In order for any society to run smoothly, it is important that the basic rights and necessities of it's citizens of well looked after. One way to help achieve this, and to help close the gap between classes in society, is to take from the rich and give to the poor. This helps all members of society, rich and poor, by decreasing crime rates, and achieving overall satisfaction with government. However, although it is often necessary for the rich to help the poor, it is not the responsibility of the wealthier members of society to support those who are not working to help themselves. If the poor are not actively working to achieve independence and self-reliance, simply offering financial assistance will not help to fix the problem, and issues related to the income gap will continue to exist.

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